tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post1101822575051304303..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Monday September 7th, 2015Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-45077209682609967732015-09-23T11:29:25.153-07:002015-09-23T11:29:25.153-07:00Greg - yeah, I was smart and told Kat first. Some ...Greg - yeah, I was smart and told Kat first. Some things are best coming from me first :P<br /><br />I copied his pictures on to the computer actually. I've got a folder of pictures he's taken (excessively blurry and close ups of nothing get deleted though) in case he wants to look at them. Or I do.<br /><br />That's a hell of an experiment! I'm impressed that you pulled it off, though I can see room for some improvement. That's hardly criticism though, seeing as I'd never even attempt this myself :)<br /><br />Morganna - yeah, kids do that, huh? Ooh, stairs! La la la la...<br /><br />Glad you managed to catch him :)Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-450128183260285812015-09-08T10:57:24.844-07:002015-09-08T10:57:24.844-07:00Falling down
Stairs: Mama runs, catches, screams....Falling down <br />Stairs: Mama runs, catches, screams.<br />Caught baby in time.<br /><br />*****************<br />My own experience with my son falling when he was about Max's age -- he climbed up the back stairs to our deck while I was in the yard.morgannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04295309367485408358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-26309102480900655482015-09-08T04:13:20.716-07:002015-09-08T04:13:20.716-07:00Oh wow, that all sounds very exciting for Max! I&...Oh wow, that all sounds very exciting for Max! I'm sure the fall was soon forgotten, although I can imagine some entertaining moments with you, Max and Kat where Kat asks Max what he did today and he says he fell off the top of the slide... :) Children heal fast though and a little bruise and a small bump are pretty much par for the course for them.<br />The picture is indeed adorable and well worth sharing, thank-you! I'm not sure what bird Max was hoping would use his nest, but I'm sure they'd be very proud to own it (and happy not to have had to build it themselves). So... are all twenty photos of the nest on your phone still? ;-)<br />I think you've managed to capture the... excitement? thrill? <i>urgency</i>... of your trip to the park today in that poem. The very short lines and the capitalisations create a great slow-motion, horrified-moment effect, especially the "Screaming..." line and the ones that follow it. If I had any criticism it's that you might lengthen the lines a little at the end when things are returning to normal to lead the reader to the conclusion that things are over.<br /><br /><b>Falling</b><br />Far away, where gravity does the laughinG,<br />Aliens gather to sport and play iN<br />Lionhead nebulae. Of all their many toys, I<br />Like least the ones for 'boys'. AlL<br />I see is tinged with red; I hear the screams, I calL<br />Naively out to these unlikely angels of the fall. A<br />Gasp... and I know another life has been switched ofF.<br /><br />[A bit of an experiment today to see if we can run an acrostic down the start of the lines and up the end of the lines. The middle three lines need work, I think.]<br />Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com