tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post155135744502319753..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Thursday October 22nd, 2015Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-73590174662894405722015-10-23T23:47:45.452-07:002015-10-23T23:47:45.452-07:00Greg - huh, I'm pretty sure I hadn't used ...Greg - huh, I'm pretty sure I hadn't used them for this prompt before. Maybe I'd mentioned them otherwise?<br /><br />*shrugs*<br /><br />Thanks for the kind words on mine :)<br /><br />That's a great choice for this prompt, and you did marvelously with it! Really enjoyed the narrator's assessment of the shopgirl at the start. And the ending was deftly handled as well.Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-17487436405430020112015-10-23T03:13:28.904-07:002015-10-23T03:13:28.904-07:00Good luck with the haircut! I'm sure one of y...Good luck with the haircut! I'm sure one of you will come out unscathed :) And good luck getting the Hallowe'en costume for Max too; perhaps you could tell him its for Kat in order to keep the surprise?<br />Hmm, I vaguely remember Amber Run from a previous random CD prompt so it's nice to see them return! And boy did you write an awkward conversation there! I like the side you picked to show it from – the side that is going to be offended no matter what – and that there's a calmness that overlies the growing sense of danger. I rather think the first speaker should be checking for his warning signs right now :) There are some great (and terrible – that air freshener line makes me dread meeting this guy) details in there too.<br /><br /><a href="https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UCVWrqxyt3Y" rel="nofollow">Breaker</a><b> by Deerhunter, from their new album.</b><br />"<i>Christ or credit</i>?" The shopgirl looked utterly normal, and the thin gold necklace around her neck didn't have a cross dangling from it. There were no crosses tattooed on her fingers, wrists or arms that I could see, and no little ikons sat on the top of her till. Maybe I'd misheard her.<br />"I beg your pardon?" I said, as politely as I could muster. Behind me some aggressive pensioner was repeatedly, but slowly, banging his trolley into my ankles.<br />"Christ or credit?" she repeated. Her eyes weren't glazed over, and I hadn't heard her being afflicted with glossolalia.<br />"Christ?" I asked. There were gasps from the people in the queue behind me, and I readied my defence: I was inquiring what she meant, not asking for Christ. But the security guard by the store exit wasn't running over or even pulling out his camtaser to get my picture before shooting me.<br />"Insert this into the card reader," she said, handing me something small and beige. I looked at it: it was a crisp circular disc about the size of my nose. I turned it over, looking for the cross, or even a simplistic representation of a fish, but it was unmarked. An itch at the back of my head finally scratched itself and I recognised the disc as a communion wafer.<br />"OK?" I said, making sure that everyone could hear the question in my voice. I slid the wafer into the card reader. The card reader beeped, and the price of my shopping appeared on its little screen. Then it beeped again, and <a href="http://biblehub.com/luke/9-16.htm" rel="nofollow">Luke 9:16</a> appeared on the screen. The shopgirl leaned over and looked at it.<br />"Oh lucky you!" she said, her smile genuine and her dentistry needing better medical cover. "Would you like some help taking it all out to the car?"<br />"I've only got..." my voice disappeared as the groceries I'd bagged doubled, then doubled again, and again and again. Thirteen multiplications later I said, "Yes, thank-you," in a much smaller voice.<br />As I left the store I heard her asking again, "Christ or Credit?" and wondered how long it would be before the theopolice caught up with her. As well as wondering what I was going to do with over 400 gallons of Ben and Jerry's Cherry Garcia ice cream.<br /><br />Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com