tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post1817277428862636628..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Saturday December 10th, 2011Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-48136949529062023522011-12-11T22:40:04.627-08:002011-12-11T22:40:04.627-08:00Greg - too early. And too cold out.
Neat little s...Greg - too early. And too cold out.<br /><br />Neat little scene you've created in your poem. Could even be expanded, if the desire and time exist.<br /><br />Writebite - I'll allow it. This time :P<br /><br />Quite like the attitude behind the poem, and loved the description of the eclipse itself.<br /><br />Inez - all aboard! :)<br /><br />Lovely rhythm and imagery in your poem. Really captured my imagination.Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-17010603281288309252011-12-11T16:21:49.755-08:002011-12-11T16:21:49.755-08:00Thought I'd join the ride . . ;)
How to eclip...Thought I'd join the ride . . ;)<br /><br />How to eclipse a paper moon<br />cast in a cardboard sky:<br />Snare it with a fishing line,<br />hook caught by an eye.Ineznoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-58209802400690248582011-12-11T04:46:36.290-08:002011-12-11T04:46:36.290-08:00marc, sorry, i made this prose, couldn't stick...marc, sorry, i made this prose, couldn't stick to four lines here ( unruly brigand i am)<br /><br />The Eclipse<br /><br />I recall one in October,<br />'76, it was, <br />the year we met.<br />We were outside in the garden,<br />the sky darkened unnaturally.<br />For ten minutes or so<br />the world inverted senselessly,<br />its eerieness reminding me <br />of countless Good Fridays spent in church,<br />hearing a story I no longer believe in.<br />Omens, they say, are the products<br />of eclipses.<br />Nah, it's pot luck, in my opinion, <br />this fate thing, so depart <br />from superstition,<br />and when light returns,<br />get on with your day.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-40023329879379041952011-12-11T00:05:37.959-08:002011-12-11T00:05:37.959-08:00It's always nice when nature provides things l...It's always nice when nature provides things like eclipses at times when we're awake, instead of making us sit up all hours waiting for them! Although it does make me wonder how early you were up to load up the truck if the moon was still out.<br />Your poem made me laugh even though I could see what was coming straight-away. Nicely done!<br /><br /><b>The eclipse</b><br />On a cast-iron bridge across the Seine,<br />She paused and looked into the fast-flowing water.<br />She said, "I think our souls are in eclipse,"<br />And I agreed, quite tired, with my daughter.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com