tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post4112221496690534781..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Friday December 25th, 2015Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-40897153106027713872016-01-04T01:15:25.605-08:002016-01-04T01:15:25.605-08:00Greg - that's a solid idea, actually. I shall ...Greg - that's a solid idea, actually. I shall keep it in mind. Thanks!<br /><br />Hah, clever take on the prompt. And a neat, tidy little snippet from your performing duo :)<br /><br />I hope you had a good Christmas!Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-59541862835108434922016-01-04T00:53:39.406-08:002016-01-04T00:53:39.406-08:00Unwrapped
It had been a good haul, and Kat had man...<b>Unwrapped</b><br />It had been a good haul, and Kat had managed to fill three <i>Partners in Rhymes</i> branded rucksacks with wallets, scarves, handbags and watches while Cecil had been delivering dead-pan beat poetry on stage. But even so....<br />"Cecil," she said as they loaded up their 'tour' van and strapped themselves in, "that was definitely prose I heard from you there at the end." Cecil demurred as he put the van into gear and slowly reversed out into traffic, but Kat wasn't put off: "What I heard," she said frostily, "was definitely... un-rapped."<br />Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-54863736544087210392015-12-26T00:31:49.354-08:002015-12-26T00:31:49.354-08:00I would call this succinct, I think: there's a...I would call this succinct, I think: there's a strong suggestion that something much worse than an old, decayed skeleton being seen has happened, and that it's been a war of attrition too. I think, maybe, you could combine the first two lines into just one, which would free up one more line to shape the horror a little more. Nothing too overt, just something to indicate a little more about the twenty years. But it's only a suggestion :)<br />Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com