tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post4251407849396958238..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Tuesday February 16th, 2016Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-14441847200882269662016-02-23T01:12:03.254-08:002016-02-23T01:12:03.254-08:00Morganna - I'm with Greg and his difficulty in...Morganna - I'm with Greg and his difficulty in choosing a favorite. I think I'm leaning slightly towards your first though, for all the story that potentially awaits within.<br /><br />Greg - yeah, they definitely spend a lot less time outdoors when it's raining. If it's really coming down I don't think they go out much at all (though I think they're required to have some outside time).<br /><br />I'd say you have every right to be pleased with this one! Very impressive. Love the imagery in your first, and I enjoyed your tie-in to your acrostic in your second. Hard to pick, but I'll go with your first as well as my favorite this week.Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-35612769508736632342016-02-17T10:58:55.208-08:002016-02-17T10:58:55.208-08:00@Morganna: I think I prefer your first haiku today...@Morganna: I think I prefer your first haiku today, though I change my mind every time I read them! But the fog just has the edge on the undertow for now :)<br /><br />@Marc: I'm not convinced that five days of beautiful rain is really enough to make you miss Spring sunshine, but I'm sure you'll find a way to prove me wrong :) But it will stop daycare putting the children outside (unless they've been <i>really</i> naughty) I suppose!<br />I think I like your second haiku better today, partly because I'm curious as to what the look-out is watching out for.<br /><br /><b>The river</b><br />Autumn mists hang on<br />Dark waters, concealing the<br />River's twists and turns<br /><br />Ice from remote floes<br />Floats unseen, a danger to<br />Those who drift along.<br /><br />[I'm quite pleased with that acrostic, actually!]<br />Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-62094357573050349492016-02-17T09:55:08.638-08:002016-02-17T09:55:08.638-08:00Up from the river
Rolls the fog, filling the town...Up from the river <br />Rolls the fog, filling the town <br />What lurks beyond sight? <br /><br />Smooth and placid, glassy <br />Don't step in, the undertow<br />Waits to pull you down.morgannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04295309367485408358noreply@blogger.com