tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post4288183925879627769..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Wednesday July 29th, 2009Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-82121318835597967382009-07-30T22:58:16.619-07:002009-07-30T22:58:16.619-07:00Greg - now why didn't I think of that? Definit...Greg - now why didn't I think of that? Definitely making use of an ice bucket next time.<br /><br />And what do you ache from? I hope you're feeling better today!<br /><br />Haha, that was great. Wonderfully unexpected epilogue as well :)<br /><br />Tam - oh, excellent! A comment inspiring another bit of writing! That makes me quite happy.<br /><br />And I thought you didn't do poetry? That was great! I really liked those last three lines in particular.<br /><br />g2 - aren't you the little romantic, then? :D<br /><br />I like this line best:<br /><br />"She stole it then, just leaving want in place."<br /><br />Very well done!Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-42689110821244025482009-07-30T14:41:02.628-07:002009-07-30T14:41:02.628-07:00Her face, 'twas all but hidden from my sight
J...Her face, 'twas all but hidden from my sight<br />Just behind that light and silken fan<br />The only thing I could behold: two eyes,<br />And oh! Most beautiful of all the land!<br /><br />A wooded brown, but so alight with fire!<br />I could only dream up her 'gelic face.<br />Simply melting my heart of tempered iron,<br />She stole it then, just leaving want in place.<br /><br />Hidden by that dark blue, black-laced fan,<br />She ran her fiery eyes over my form<br />Reduced to puddle I was, no more man,<br />Oh, f'only if those eyes turned not to scorn!<br /><br />Alas, the prize that could never be mine:<br />The girl behind the fan whose eyes did shine.<br />------<br />It's hard to write a sonnet about unrequited love-at-first-sight, especially if the writer knows absolutely nothing about such love.<br /><br />But hey! At least it involves a fan!g2 (la pianista irlandesa)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11746312007846172620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-49631781502609490662009-07-30T09:59:15.771-07:002009-07-30T09:59:15.771-07:00Long day at work,
office hot as always,
shoes feel...Long day at work,<br />office hot as always,<br />shoes feel way too tight,<br />is that right?<br />are my feet swelling?<br />time to relax,<br />a glass of sweet tea,<br />the fan, <br />a bowl of ice and me.<br /><br /><br />Thank you Greg for mentioning the bowl of ice trick, it inspired this little ditty.TAMmommyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06976296488407491090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-84826380088839145572009-07-30T00:11:02.416-07:002009-07-30T00:11:02.416-07:00Fans are wonderful things. Are you doing the old ...Fans are wonderful things. Are you doing the old of putting a dish of ice just beneath it so it blows cold air around as well? (I have a feeling it works better if the ice is in water, but it's been a while.)<br /><br />Great little poem, though plagiarism gets called 'research' if you steal from enough people... :)<br /><br />Much as I like your poem, I can't think how to continue it; I ache too much to be inspired at the moment!<br /><br />The fan<br /><br />Goliath met up with David,<br />A giant and a little man,<br />And David tried some flattery,<br />"I'm your biggest fan..."<br /><br />"Haha," laughed Goliath,<br />"One as short as you,<br />Shouldn't claim to be the biggest anything,<br />So let's see what you can do."<br /><br />They went out back and played some games,<br />And David always cheated,<br />"The littler man has won at last!<br />Goliath is defeated!"<br /><br />But there is a little epilogue,<br />As David staggered home,<br />Goliath ran him over,<br />And stole his mobile phone.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com