tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post6101180459075137191..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Monday June 29th, 2009Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-34416766278312384172009-06-30T17:22:50.224-07:002009-06-30T17:22:50.224-07:00Greg - there was a little bit of that but I also d...Greg - there was a little bit of that but I also decided that my ending was rather clever. It's usually a bad sign when I think something I write is clever :P<br /><br />iWitness! That's brilliant.<br /><br />Jack - I'm loving the variations on the final line in each stanza. Very effectively done.Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-46545802915924862182009-06-30T15:08:37.242-07:002009-06-30T15:08:37.242-07:00Sometimes I stare into the sky,
or watch in antici...Sometimes I stare into the sky,<br />or watch in anticipation as cars drive by,<br />waiting for an accident to happen.<br /><br />My eyes won't be averted, <br />and, though it seems quite perverted,<br />I'm waiting for an accident to happen.<br /><br />So after the tragedy has taken it's toll<br />and the news cameras start to roll<br />I'm there, having waited for an accident to happen.<br /><br />But what happens when the witness<br />is witnessed instead?<br />I'm an accident waiting to happen.Jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16750398953237476904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-22281965332676727892009-06-30T02:29:37.125-07:002009-06-30T02:29:37.125-07:00Your second stanza suggests that you weren't t...Your second stanza suggests that you weren't too keen on writing this poem; lack of time, or lack of inspiration? The first one is great though!<br /><br />Eyewitness<br /><br />There is a little camera, at the bottom of my street,<br />That watches all the places where the little people meet,<br />We're using it to evolve them, to select for genetic fitness,<br />It's a technological miracle, my pocket-sized iWitness.<br /><br />We gun down all the weaklings, we cull them just like cattle,<br />We don't think of them as people, but as baggage or as chattel,<br />We're making them much stronger, improving species fitness,<br />And it's all been made possible with my pocket-sized iWitness.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com