tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post6777678226905295674..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Tuesday March 6th, 2012Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-83714307941602957962012-03-07T23:08:19.284-08:002012-03-07T23:08:19.284-08:00Greg - love your second one, it really tells a sto...Greg - love your second one, it really tells a story in just three lines.<br /><br />Writebite - that's a fine pair of haiku, they go together perfectly.<br /><br />Krystin - two great haiku, it's hard to choose a fav. I think the second one wins out for me, mostly for that final line.<br /><br />Cathryn - yup, that'd be what I was referencing :)<br /><br />Ah, you egg me on to read more with all these snippets!<br /><br />GZ - love the sudden turn in the first, and the contrast in the second. Great work :)Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-14812368152501336182012-03-07T21:09:27.832-08:002012-03-07T21:09:27.832-08:00A pat on the back,
Then words of great praise lead...A pat on the back,<br />Then words of great praise lead to<br />Knife between shoulders.<br /><br />You look up annoyed<br />As the cliff face flashes by you.<br />Big smile, looking down.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-83481078267372674872012-03-07T07:39:28.181-08:002012-03-07T07:39:28.181-08:00Lovely work everyone. :}
I suspect the Carbon pap...Lovely work everyone. :}<br /><br />I suspect the Carbon paper Marc is talking about is the kind where you write on one page and it copies it to the one underneth... used to have lab Notebooks like that back in the school days... And my check book.<br /><br />Any-who how about some haiku. *giggles*<br /><br /><br /><b>The Traitor</b><br /><br />Working for Vervell<br />But from Wholawski's elite<br />He wants to help us<br /><br />His loyalty pledged<br />For the young Prince of Azure<br />To reclaim his throne<br /><br /><i>Related to Book 3: Phoenix Tirumpahnt, only in this case the traitor's on the good side.</i> :}Cathryn Leighhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14816869021658935999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-55617012065817773562012-03-07T06:29:47.114-08:002012-03-07T06:29:47.114-08:00He betray his heart
Cut it out and locked it away
...He betray his heart<br />Cut it out and locked it away<br />In a dead mans chest<br /><br />The discovery<br />Ended in mutiny<br />Maps are dangerousKrystin Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10911062028248581952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-51734985011103080132012-03-07T02:17:51.816-08:002012-03-07T02:17:51.816-08:00The Traitor - haiku
a political
prisoner - a dis...The Traitor - haiku<br /><br />a political <br />prisoner - a dissenter,<br />they called him traitor<br /><br />prison controlled him -<br />the government put him there -<br />buying his silenceAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-83355555222197042322012-03-07T00:08:50.285-08:002012-03-07T00:08:50.285-08:00There's nothing wrong with talking about the w...There's nothing wrong with talking about the weather! Though I am British and we're used to getting all four seasons in one day, which is quite discussion-worthy :)<br />Sounds like you need to set up some wind-breaks so that you appreciate the sunshine better. How about raspberry canes and tomato plants?<br />I like your first haiku best, though I'm not sure how easy it would be to read notes written on carbon paper ;-)<br /><br /><b>The traitor</b><br />She smiles at you,<br />Distracting you while her mates<br />Steal your bag and keys.<br /><br />---------<br /><br />The guards in the room<br />All wear the wrong uniform.<br />The king is betray'd.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com