tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post6925326183687324223..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Sunday February 20th, 2011Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-17988623643405553382011-02-22T00:01:33.661-08:002011-02-22T00:01:33.661-08:00Greg - I suspect they'd just curl up in a corn...Greg - I suspect they'd just curl up in a corner and wait for morning :)<br /><br />I'm not sure which stanza is my favorite, but it's either the second or the third I think. Fun poem :)Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-38597172020147157302011-02-21T06:09:53.695-08:002011-02-21T06:09:53.695-08:00Pelican Bar looks like a fun place to drink, but I...Pelican Bar looks like a fun place to drink, but I wonder how many of the locals discover that they're too drunk to swim home and they've missed the last boat? :) The dolphin sounds pretty cool too!<br />The post-apocalyptic world you describe today is fascinating; it'd be nice to know more about it and how it came to be. I like the idea of the heat being too intense for people to venture outside in it, definitely.<br />I find the second paragraph a bit tricky though; something about the way the heat is anthropomorphised feels wrong to me, but I can't be more precise, so perhaps it's just me?<br /><br /><b>Going out for a drink</b><br />Short fat Romeo,<br />Tiring of trying hard to think,<br />Goes out to find his Juliet<br />To take her for a drink.<br /><br />Outside her council-flat,<br />He calls her name repeatedly,<br />Until she has had enough,<br />And comes out, defeatedly.<br /><br />"Romeo, short fat Romeo,<br />The restraining order's clear,<br />You're really not to bother me,<br />Or anyone I'm near."<br /><br />So Romeo, fat and weepy,<br />Must go out drinking on his own,<br />Discovering late that evening<br />He's been evicted from his home.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com