tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post7132606591866970973..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Tuesday July 26th, 2011Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-82288613206747402762011-07-28T00:02:40.542-07:002011-07-28T00:02:40.542-07:00Greg - the last line of your second haiku wins the...Greg - the last line of your second haiku wins the day for me this week :)<br /><br />Andrew - I like the contrasts between your two haiku. Makes the second one even more effective, I think.<br /><br />Denin - can feel the bitterness in the first one so strongly, great job.Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-46491499528195274852011-07-27T16:33:58.677-07:002011-07-27T16:33:58.677-07:00Pseudo warrior
Behind his shield, his desk
The sha...Pseudo warrior<br />Behind his shield, his desk<br />The shallow hero<br /><br />Final pool length now,<br />the fastest always goes last<br />Soaked in urgencyDeninhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14184430819173388170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-22629312676924510882011-07-27T06:39:01.246-07:002011-07-27T06:39:01.246-07:00I dunno, I prefer your second one, Marc, and your ...I dunno, I prefer your second one, Marc, and your second one as well Greg.<br /><br /><br />The Teleprompter,<br />It tells the anchor what to<br />Say, smiling cheaply.<br /><br />The anchor leaves the<br />Studio, bogged down by the<br />Sad news, starts crying.Andrewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04171089909837836988noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-76910559068514063272011-07-27T00:10:47.396-07:002011-07-27T00:10:47.396-07:00Glad the weather's better; much as I love rasp...Glad the weather's better; much as I love raspberries it would a shame if other crops didn't fruit as well!<br />I like your first haiku better, as I think you may have guessed, but the second one is definitely made by it's final line.<br /><br /><b>The anchorman</b><br />Like a neck's millstone<br />Intending to drag you down<br />The anchorman waits<br /><br />-------<br /><br />Fix'd in position<br />The anchorman holds the line<br />He's cheaper than sand.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com