tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post9120131001632142269..comments2023-12-06T00:48:23.734-08:00Comments on Daily Writing Practice: Thursday February 25th, 2010Marchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-71130116815478084082010-02-26T16:50:52.213-08:002010-02-26T16:50:52.213-08:00Hmm, good point about the ending.
I like the rhyt...Hmm, good point about the ending.<br /><br />I like the rhythm of yours :)Marchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14952331166517430843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1149217012399643733.post-41958905902770450602010-02-25T21:31:15.396-08:002010-02-25T21:31:15.396-08:00Poor radio. I really enjoyed this poem, the short...Poor radio. I really enjoyed this poem, the short lines leading me rapidly through a tragic little tale to the end. I wonder if you need the last three lines though? They seem to be a way of exiting the poem, and I think you could just finish with "Why it blow/Was required" as easily.<br /><br />The broken radio<br /><br />Static prevails,<br />White noise hissing in his ears,<br />Like snakes he's dreaded since<br />He was old enough to know his fears.<br /><br />Static prevails,<br />Though he twists the dial, seeking<br />A voice, some music, another station<br />Anywhere that life might be leaking.<br /><br />Static prevails,<br />And he prays to a meagre god the radio is bust.<br />Else he's alone in this nuclear winter<br />Waiting to turn into dust.Greghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08503319830584828982noreply@blogger.com