The exercise:
Write two haiku inspired by the word: soft.
Forgot to mention this yesterday: I took Max to the health clinic to get him weighed, since it had been almost a month since we'd last done that (he was fifteen and a half pounds back then).
Now? Seventeen pounds.
I'm sure if I'd asked it, my back could have told me that.
Mine:
So soft and quiet
it was nearly missed; father's
final wheezing breath.
* * *
She enters the room
clad in a white dress that feels
like wearing a cloud.
Heh, my dog weighs about 7 pounds and it gets tiring carrying her about after about half-an hour; I can imagine that Max starts feeling heavy after about fifteen minutes! Still, it sounds like he's gaining weight well. You'll have to teach him to walk already!
ReplyDeleteI like your first haiku better today because it's sentimental without being overpowering. And because there's at least two ways to continue that, in very different veins!
Soft
No-one told him that
pillows should be soft. He stuff'd
them all with sharp rocks.
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Piano pedal
broke. Moonlight Sonata sounds
like Anvil Chorus.
[Both Moonlight Sonata and Anvil Chorus are actual pieces of music, if you're curious.]
Hi Marc,
ReplyDeleteI have found your nice writing blog, which I really like it. I enjoyed to read your posts.
I was wondering if you would be interested in sharing your posts and ideas on Glipho? It's a quite new social publishing platform for bloggers like you. :)
Tiny new piggies;
ReplyDeleteI never knew this softness.
Ten perfect toes. Love.
Exhausted new mom
Dreaming of my soft pillow.
Stop looking at clock
I know I have already deleted this entry, but I am having trouble figuring out how to post this the new way. -Mo
Greg - yeah, no rush on the walking thing. That's a whole bucket of trouble that I am not ready for yet.
ReplyDeleteHah! I was aware of Moonlight Sonata, but not Anvil Chorus. Makes that one all the better :)
Monika - thanks! And I appreciate the offer but free time is extremely limited these days.
Mo - love the sentiment of your first one, and can totally appreciate the feelings behind the second.
And no worries about the deletion and figuring things out, since I was the one that forced the new way upon you :)