Hmm, it's easy to show that someone is weary in four lines, but the traveller part is a bit trickier. I've tried to catch that by picking a moment where the narrator wants to stop but isn't being allowed to, and... well, I guess we'll see if it works.
The weary traveller The boarding house is boarded up: Wall-eyed men ignore me as they hammer nails Through plywood sheets into rotten doorframes And shake their heads when I ask if there’s room to sleep.
And -- I'm not sure. I think maybe not, I think this could be anyone, not just a traveller. Hmph.
Greg - I think you did just fine with the prompt, considering you did only have four lines. I don't know what I would have done, to be honest.
Mostly I was just trying to give you a prompt that could have followed last week's, if you so chose, but was open enough to interpretation that you wouldn't feel obligated to do so :)
And... actually, I still can't say if this would follow last week's or not. Guess next Saturday will clear things up. Maybe.
Hmm, it's easy to show that someone is weary in four lines, but the traveller part is a bit trickier. I've tried to catch that by picking a moment where the narrator wants to stop but isn't being allowed to, and... well, I guess we'll see if it works.
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The boarding house is boarded up:
Wall-eyed men ignore me as they hammer nails
Through plywood sheets into rotten doorframes
And shake their heads when I ask if there’s room to sleep.
And -- I'm not sure. I think maybe not, I think this could be anyone, not just a traveller. Hmph.
Greg - I think you did just fine with the prompt, considering you did only have four lines. I don't know what I would have done, to be honest.
ReplyDeleteMostly I was just trying to give you a prompt that could have followed last week's, if you so chose, but was open enough to interpretation that you wouldn't feel obligated to do so :)
And... actually, I still can't say if this would follow last week's or not. Guess next Saturday will clear things up. Maybe.