The exercise:
Two Haiku Tuesday continues, despite the end of ultimate season. Mostly because I'm lazy. Partly because I do enjoy a haiku or two each week.
The topic tonight: it's in the eyes.
Mine:
My dear I must say
You have very enchanting
Windows to your soul
* * *
I can see just fine.
No, really I can. Honest!
Put the laser down.
Ultimate's over already? That feels like it's been quite a short season. How did you do overall this time then?
ReplyDeleteThank-you for the continuation of yesterday's piece, though I feel you only wrote half of it. What about the guy left behind? :-P
I like both your haikus, they work rather well as 'his point of view/her point of view'.
It's in the eyes
Conjunctivitis
Hayfever's bonus this year,
It is in my eyes.
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As green as rock pools,
As bright as supernovae,
Only made of glass.
Your first is sweet; there's just something about the second that strikes me as amusing.
ReplyDeleteAs soon as you mentioned eyes, I immediately thought of Connor's Second Dichotomy, and it was just too perfect an idea to pass up.
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Vibrant, warm, cur'ous,
Enthusiasm abounds
In those living greys.
- - - - -
Cold, tired, judging
There's almost something sinister
In the Doctor's eyes.
reddened amber eyes
ReplyDeletewatch as white lines disappear
blinded by false joy
* * *
eyes flowing with love
gazed with warmth at the wedding
now kill on command
Greg - well I didn't cave in and start haiku Tuesday until more than halfway through, so that might have something to do with it. We did okay overall, had a good bit of fun though.
ReplyDeleteAnd... I'll think about the other side of the story :)
I like both of yours, perhaps the first one slightly more.
g2 - hah, nicely done. I like the second one a lot :)
Monica - really liking the sinister turn in your second haiku.
I wonder why you have such an affinity for the second one... such a mystery...
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