The exercise:
Your (slightly later than usual) prompt for this week's Two Haiku Tuesday: through the woods.
Had an appointment to get my back worked on and then went for dinner with Kat tonight, thus the lateness.
Mine:
Sun slips through branches
Bending low under the weight
Of last night's snowfall
* * *
Dead leaves underfoot,
Brittle as my ancient bones,
Leading me back home.
3 comments:
You posted before midnight, surely that's the only thing that counts? And you're onto a good number of days as well, 625 is 25 squared.
Both haikus are melancholic and do a good job of evoking the surroundings of the narrator. The second haiku is a little more oblique, and though it offers more of a question that the first haiku (which is essentially a description of a place), the lack of an answer to the question is a little disatisfying.
Through the woods
Hansel and Gretel
Hand in hand, dart through the woods
Hoping to find home.
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Croci blossom here
Where we buried your mother
In the woods she lov'd.
Little hands printed
In the snow -- a baby, here?
Stripes flash -- hi, raccoon!
Greg - yeah, pre-midnight is all I really care about... I've just been getting the posts up early recently.
I actually like my second better because it's more open ended. Shrug.
Your second haiku is a lovely image.
Morganna - that's cute and made me smile :)
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