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Tuesday February 23rd, 2010

The exercise:

Your (slightly later than usual) prompt for this week's Two Haiku Tuesday: through the woods.

Had an appointment to get my back worked on and then went for dinner with Kat tonight, thus the lateness.

Mine:

Sun slips through branches
Bending low under the weight
Of last night's snowfall

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Dead leaves underfoot,
Brittle as my ancient bones,
Leading me back home.

3 comments:

  1. You posted before midnight, surely that's the only thing that counts? And you're onto a good number of days as well, 625 is 25 squared.

    Both haikus are melancholic and do a good job of evoking the surroundings of the narrator. The second haiku is a little more oblique, and though it offers more of a question that the first haiku (which is essentially a description of a place), the lack of an answer to the question is a little disatisfying.

    Through the woods

    Hansel and Gretel
    Hand in hand, dart through the woods
    Hoping to find home.

    -----

    Croci blossom here
    Where we buried your mother
    In the woods she lov'd.

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  2. Little hands printed
    In the snow -- a baby, here?
    Stripes flash -- hi, raccoon!

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  3. Greg - yeah, pre-midnight is all I really care about... I've just been getting the posts up early recently.

    I actually like my second better because it's more open ended. Shrug.

    Your second haiku is a lovely image.

    Morganna - that's cute and made me smile :)

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