The exercise:
Your Two Haiku Tuesday prompt this week: the getaway.
Drumming class again tonight, so I'll just get right to it.
Mine:
The slick bank robbers
Were caught thanks to their sleeping
Getaway driver
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I'm ready to leave,
To run, to walk, even crawl,
'Til I feel alive.
hi, marc. i have never written a haiku (and the last time i wrote a rhymed poem was years ago when..well, years ago.) but there's always a first time, isn't it?
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i have had enough
of hockey and horse racing
of basketball and football;
sports commentaries
news analysis and now
damn that super bowl.
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did i just break the 'haiku' rule? and i meant no offence to sports fans. :-)
me again.
ReplyDeletei forgot to explain how my little "poem" there relates to today's prompt. well i think i had just verbalized my reasons for wanting out of this house. so that's my getaway? oy, whatever.
Hmm, I must be tired this morning, I can't think of anything particularly interesting to write here. Oh well, hope the drumming class is a good one!
ReplyDeleteI like the humour of your first haiku, but I prefer the second overall.
@summerfield: I like both of yours but I prefer the second I think.
the Getaway
Her head turns away;
Softly as the rains of Spring
I flee her drama.
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Surprise holiday,
Two days in the summer sun:
Precious getaway.
Summerfield - well you've come to the right place to practice :)
ReplyDeleteHaha, I liked yours, though the first one does break the haiku 'rule'. They go 5 syllables for the first line, 7 for the second, and 5 for the third.
Practice makes improvement! :)
Greg - it took me a second reading to get your first one (blame my tired brain) but now that I do I like it best :D