The exercise:
Welcome to February! Let us write two haiku about: beaches.
Note: I'm away on my honeymoon so this is a scheduled post.
Mine:
Sand between my toes,
Salty air in my nostrils...
Sounds like paradise.
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Waves always crashing,
Birds singing at my window -
How am I to sleep?
7 comments:
wow! methinks everyone went to the beach, too! that or hiding from this impending "monster" snowstorm. in any case here are my 2 haiku.
i'll raise a glass of pinot noir to this storm. here! here!
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beaches
walk along the shore
fine white sands stretch beyond
blue waters beckon
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oiled bodies abound
burn under the blazing sun
palm leaves swaying
anybody here? hello?! :-)
Right here Summerfield - nice haikus, I want to go to your beaches - now.
Here are mine:
Warm skin pressed to sand
Soft waves caressing the two
Intertwined as one
Running along surf
Heat rumbling in their bellies
Tumbling together
whew! dumbricht, i thought you'd all gone with marc. thanks for the compliments, your haikus are nice as well.
i am originally from the tropics and i do miss the beaches especially on days like this.
marc, i'm trying to catch up on the prompts; am not slacking though, am writing something and it's in the way of my real writing. you and kat have a good holiday/honeymoon and i'll leave an e-mail for when you're back.
I want to be at
The beach! It's nineteen below
And getting colder!
Boiling water froze
On contact with outside air.
Where's the nearest beach?
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Nineteen below is in Fahrenheit. I believe that's -28 Celsius. At least it's not snowing.
Great work everyone! :)
Here's mine:
Beaches
Sun empowerment.
Waves and waves of sufferings.
Compassion boundless.
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Angry waves howlers.
Cooling feet on the soft sand.
I rest in the tent.
@summerfield: I like both your haikus; they're very different kinds of beaches. The first one seems more appealing to me, but I burn at the first sign of sun!
@David: Those are very sensual haikus! They read as a part of a greater whole as well, which is a nice touch. On the whole, I think I prefer the first.
@morganna: wow, it sounds cold where you are! I love the imagery in the second haiku, but the first one is my favourite for its heartfelt sentiment.
@Zhongming: very abstract; I think I understand your first haiku, but I'm not completely sure. I like both equally this time.
@Marc: hah, I hate sand between my toes! It only dries when you get inside, and then it's a nuisance! I like your second haiku best, even though I find waves crashing to be really soothing.
Beaches
An abandoned beach,
A nuclear shore, where men
Once split the atom.
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After all these floods,
There's so much sand in the house,
The kitchen's a beach!
Summerfield - thanks for being brave enough to go first :D
Two great image-based haiku. I think I liked the second one best.
David - mmm, sexy beach haiku. I approve.
Morganna - I can totally sympathize with both your haiku, as I was feeling that way in November here :)
Zhongming - like them both, nicely done!
Greg - I could fall asleep to waves crashing on the beach every night. Too far from waves here at home, but I had the chance on several nights while we were away :)
A beach kitchen! Sounds fantastic to me.
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