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Saturday June 11th, 2011

The exercise:

A four line poem that has something to do with: early.

We had a pretty decent market this morning, despite a rather slow start and a bit of rain. But thankfully once the sun came out, so did the customers.

While we were eating breakfast this morning a raccoon wandered into our yard. I'm glad Kat was there too or else I would have assumed I was dreaming. I haven't quite adjusted to being awake at 5:30 in the morning yet.

Now I'm pretty much asleep on my feet, so let's get on with it.

Mine:

The alarm pokes me awake,
Or at least it tries.
It's early morning deafness,
Though it is unwise.

7 comments:

  1. So... we were supposed to come up with our own fifth lines for yesterday's prompt then? I didn't realise that... but I think it had good effects :)
    I wonder how long it'll be before you're reporting a bear wandering into your yard? I'll start thinking of a name for it right away!
    Heh, I'm quite happy for the alarm to wake it, it's the dog who's annoying....

    Early
    Persephone was feeling bored
    As Pluto had a chill in his ear,
    So she came home to Demeter early,
    And spring started in January that year.

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  2. Marc: my alarm clock sometimes has that effect on me :)

    Greg: would love it for spring to start in January :)

    Here's mine:

    Early

    She said she would be home early,
    despite that call from the past,
    now her tardiness seems to me, barely
    keeping my patience from trying to last.

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  3. Marc: for some inexplicit reason my husband set the alarm today. Alarm clocks are evil.

    Greg: love the Persephone story, I would like her to bring Spring early one year.

    Watermark: you made early late. :)



    Early

    Two little girls skipping along the Thames.
    Dock workers curse every other word in a pub.
    Rotten wood protudes from the dark murky water.
    Ancient, old and young intersect early evening.

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  4. Anon has returned :)

    Marc- Oddly enough, I rarely ever get that feeling. I suppose I'm lucky that way! Either way love your poem.

    Oh and Greg - I loved yours too (probably because I'm a big fan of greek mythology!).

    Anywho, here's mine:
    They all saw it coming,
    But were surprised it took me so long.
    So I told them that I'm early, not late,
    For in the future he too will fall.

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  5. Greg - oh, I didn't realize you'd honestly been confused by the prompt. I suppose that makes it my bad then. At least the results were entertaining!

    I also wouldn't be opposed to a January start to spring :)

    Watermark - very clever take on the prompt. Nicely done!

    Mother in T.O. - if my alarm had gone off this morning, it would not have survived the experience.

    Love the scene you've painted in your poem.

    Anon - welcome back :)

    I enjoyed the twists and turns of your poem, and that is an intriguing final line.

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  6. . . . and I'm back

    The sun rises
    The bread rises
    The flag rises
    I roll over

    One for late

    Late again
    light's on
    Hi, Mom
    Grounded

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  7. David - hurray! :)

    Love the succinctness of the second one, and the first... well, that could be me most days.

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