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Tuesday April 2nd, 2013

The exercise:

Write two haiku about: the needle.

Max is going in for his second round of vaccinations tomorrow morning. Blech.

Mine:

It's for my own good,
or so they say; if I could,
I'd take my chances.

*     *     *

Don't look. Never look.
One glance and you'd know that it's
longer than your arm.

6 comments:

  1. Heh, I'd say you're dreading it more than Max is! I think the phobias you're after are Belonephobia (fear of sharply pointed object, especially needles) and Iatrophobia (fear of doctors).
    I think I like your first haiku better today, but that maybe because needles don't bother me especially.

    The needle
    The tattoo artist
    called the Needle is grinning.
    Your turn's coming up.

    ----------
    I need a needle,
    But I have fifteen haystacks.
    Wish me lots of luck!

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  2. Needle plunges deep
    Veins fill with a sweet poison
    Sleep comes violently

    Needle left within
    Father rots in the bath tub
    Find the little boy

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  3. Yards of flawless silk
    Gold needle pierces dark blue
    Teardrops wet my face

    Haystacks gleam golden
    Autumn sunshine warms the field
    Where is my needle?

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  4. I'm starting to like this Haiku business.

    The needle in my
    compass always points to you.
    My rose is aligned.

    Sing to me loudly.
    Vinyl. Needle. Spin. Heart SCREAMS.
    I love you, Elvis!!!

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  5. City of New York,
    a vaccination of life.
    The cure for the Dulls.

    "Oh look, a syringe,"
    She showed her young, new playmate.
    "You ain't in Kansas."

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  6. Greg - yeah, well, he obviously had no idea what was coming... right up until the first needle went in. Which, I suppose, is probably for the best.

    Both your haiku are rather nightmarish, in their own ways.

    David - oof, very powerful work.

    Aholiab - great imagery in your first, and love the take in the second.

    Mo - glad to hear it! :)

    Love the sweetness of your first one.

    Landofty - wonderful first haiku, that's a really great take on the prompt.

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