The exercise:
Write two haiku about: the homecoming.
Long day on the road. Nothing went wrong, really, it just took a long time to get here with extra stops (and an extra long break for lunch and playtime in a park).
Grateful to be home though.
Looking forward to getting settled in again.
Not looking forward to working at the bakery tomorrow morning.
I'm exhausted. Good night.
Mine:
Been a long time gone;
familiar faces now lined.
I'm ready to leave.
* * *
Sweet scents of fruit trees,
the soft nightsong of crickets -
it's good to be home.
A football game, a
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A rite of passage.
Warm and stuffy, the
House welcomes back its people
After a long absence.
@Morganna: I think I like your first haiku better today for its summary -- in a haiku indeed! -- of a Homecoming in American style.
ReplyDelete@Marc: Playtime in the park sounds like a good idea, even if it did mean taking longer to get home :)
I think I like your second haiku better today for the mention of crickets as that reminds me of living in Southern Germany and hearing it.
The homecoming
Dawn touches the sky
A warning: I must return
Quickly as a bat
Some would fear the grave
But it welcomes me back home
Until the next night...
Morganna - I like both of yours, but the second managed to make itself my favorite this time. It's a great sentiment you've captured with it.
ReplyDeleteGreg - I enjoyed your take on the prompt. Cleverly done and quite unexpected.
And I'm glad you enjoyed my second. I wrote it after sitting out on the deck with Kat not long after dark. The crickets were too loud to be ignored :)