It's good to hear that Hindsight is on its way! We have two months left in which to wrap up, though I think we've managed to cover all the big events you listed at the start. There might be an issue with the mime still, unless they got burned down by the pyromaniac, and I suspect our hero will never properly resolve his issues with his father, but there's hope!
Upon Closer Inspection Stare at the corners, Quickly tease a thread looser... Underneath are -- SNAKES!
It needs scrutiny, Never working without it. This time is the -- SNAKES!
Welcome resmitoto to Marc's blog! Normally he'd roll out the welcome wagon himself, but he's a little busy at the moment (definitely not assassinating anyone on the instructions of the RMCP, that's assured) and so I have taken over the reins for a brief period. (I should probably point out, since you're new here, that our welcome wagon is a literal thing hauled by oxen that are part of a Canadian breeding programme intended to resurrect the Aurochs in an attempt to have cattle the size of moose, with roughly the same temperament. Well, the same temperament as moose with toothache, anyway).
But I digress. I must say, it's been a while since I had the chance to practice my Indonesian, but you had me at "keuntungan". Unluckily for you though, I happen to work in the iGaming and sports betting industry and I have much better recommendations for places to bet than Bandar Togel. If you'd like some, please send a hair-and-blood sample to Marc and we promise not to use them in the Aurochs resurrection programme.
I'm digressing again. I'm fairly certain you've overshot the syllable count for a haiku, or even six for that matter, and though I find your language ornate and rhythmic the lack of reference to the seasons is a problem. "Musim dingin" is mellifluous and meets Japanese standards, and I'd really like you to restructure your work to fit the syllable count and make use of it :)
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It's good to hear that Hindsight is on its way! We have two months left in which to wrap up, though I think we've managed to cover all the big events you listed at the start. There might be an issue with the mime still, unless they got burned down by the pyromaniac, and I suspect our hero will never properly resolve his issues with his father, but there's hope!
Upon Closer Inspection
Stare at the corners,
Quickly tease a thread looser...
Underneath are -- SNAKES!
It needs scrutiny,
Never working without it.
This time is the -- SNAKES!
[Mr Wriggles says hello :)]
Welcome resmitoto to Marc's blog! Normally he'd roll out the welcome wagon himself, but he's a little busy at the moment (definitely not assassinating anyone on the instructions of the RMCP, that's assured) and so I have taken over the reins for a brief period. (I should probably point out, since you're new here, that our welcome wagon is a literal thing hauled by oxen that are part of a Canadian breeding programme intended to resurrect the Aurochs in an attempt to have cattle the size of moose, with roughly the same temperament. Well, the same temperament as moose with toothache, anyway).
But I digress. I must say, it's been a while since I had the chance to practice my Indonesian, but you had me at "keuntungan". Unluckily for you though, I happen to work in the iGaming and sports betting industry and I have much better recommendations for places to bet than Bandar Togel. If you'd like some, please send a hair-and-blood sample to Marc and we promise not to use them in the Aurochs resurrection programme.
I'm digressing again. I'm fairly certain you've overshot the syllable count for a haiku, or even six for that matter, and though I find your language ornate and rhythmic the lack of reference to the seasons is a problem. "Musim dingin" is mellifluous and meets Japanese standards, and I'd really like you to restructure your work to fit the syllable count and make use of it :)
Greg - yeah, it's just a matter of wrapping things up now, I think.
Eh, I suppose these haiku are okay. I guess.
Also: nice to see you having fun with spam again :)
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