Saturday February 7th, 2015

The exercise:

Write a four line poem about something that is: naked.

This afternoon I brought Max with me to Shoppers Drug Mart to get him some more diapers. While we were in the lineup to pay for them he wandered over to the magazine rack one cashier over from us. I saw where he was headed but wasn't sure how it would play out.

So he goes up to a magazine with a woman in a bikini on its cover. He points at it, looks back at me, and then - quite loudly, and quite clearly - declares the following:

"That lady naked."

I could not swallow my snort of laughter in time, but I managed to follow it up with something along the lines of:

"Not quite. She's wearing her bathing suit."

It's really a shame there weren't more people around to hear him. I'm not sure the old lady in front of me in line fully appreciated it.

Anyway, I probably could have squeezed that into a four line poem but I thought more than a little would have been lost in the translation.

I guess that means that now I have to come up with another angle on the prompt inspired by today's fun.

Mine:

Clothes scattered
Across the floor;
Your greed is
Naked once more

3 comments:

Greg said...

I wish I'd been there to see that. Well done for not pointing out that a 'lady' wouldn't be appearing so ill-dressed on the cover of a magazine :)
And I think you've done an excellent job of both an entertaining story and a great little four line poem this week, so great work!

Naked
"These pictures will all be glamour shots,"
said the photographer for whom she had the hots.
But as she pulled her shirt over her head,
He changed his mind and gave her a burqa instead.

ivybennet said...

Lovely poems, both of you!

Naked:

I shall bare my feelings of you
To you, hoping the sheer vulgarity
Will not cause you to turn away for
They are the minimum of my existence.

Marc said...

Greg - oh man, I wish I could have been that quick witted. I'll save that one for next time!

Hah, love that abrupt reversal of course you gave us in the final line. Was not expecting that at all :)

Ivybennet - great emotion in your poem. I can really get a sense of who the narrator is and the position he or she is in.