Tuesday January 7th, 2014

The exercise:

Write two haiku about: surrender.

Well that was the sort of night that makes me want to quit bowling. Again.

Last time the feeling prevailed for over a decade. This time will probably last for a week.

Either way, I need to get to bed. I'm covering the 7am to 3pm shift at the gym tomorrow and need to get some friggin' sleep.

Mine:

Please, no more. Enough!
Let it be done, be finished!
The fight has left me.

*     *     *

Hoist up the white flag,
let them see our cowardice...
but keep your knives sharp.

3 Comments:

Greg said...

You have to have off-days occasionally to appreciate how much you're improving. The only thing that ever changes is how smaller and smaller errors becomes bigger and bigger sources of annoyance and frustration. You now have a night that you can compare other nights to and think "Well at least I didn't play as badly as that time!"
I hope you sleep well though :)
I like your first haiku better this week, as I can definitely sympathise with that feeling.

Surrender
Gentle as blanket-
Ing snow, despair draws a dark
Veil across. I quit.

Even your hopeful
Uplifting words can't help me.
Perfect surrender.

[This acrostic thing is becoming a challenge, but I'm quite pleased with how today's haikus have turned out!]

morganna said...

Meant to be a play on the prayers for this and that we see -- the mother's prayer, the child's prayer, etc. Sorry I had to allow an extra syllable in the 1st line.
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Bank Robber's Surrender
Give it up -- put your
Hands in the air -- the gig's up!

Marc said...

Greg - yes, as long as I don't manage to have a worse outing :P

I continue to be impressed with your acrostic haiku. Your first one is particularly good this week.

Morganna - I don't mind an extra syllable here and there :)