Tuesday August 23rd, 2016

The exercise:

Write two haiku about: the homecoming.

Long day on the road. Nothing went wrong, really, it just took a long time to get here with extra stops (and an extra long break for lunch and playtime in a park).

Grateful to be home though.

Looking forward to getting settled in again.

Not looking forward to working at the bakery tomorrow morning.

I'm exhausted. Good night.

Mine:

Been a long time gone;
familiar faces now lined.
I'm ready to leave.

*     *     *

Sweet scents of fruit trees,
the soft nightsong of crickets -
it's good to be home.

3 Comments:

morganna said...

A football game, a
Fancy dance, a king and queen,
A rite of passage.

Warm and stuffy, the
House welcomes back its people
After a long absence.

Greg said...

@Morganna: I think I like your first haiku better today for its summary -- in a haiku indeed! -- of a Homecoming in American style.

@Marc: Playtime in the park sounds like a good idea, even if it did mean taking longer to get home :)
I think I like your second haiku better today for the mention of crickets as that reminds me of living in Southern Germany and hearing it.

The homecoming
Dawn touches the sky
A warning: I must return
Quickly as a bat

Some would fear the grave
But it welcomes me back home
Until the next night...

Marc said...

Morganna - I like both of yours, but the second managed to make itself my favorite this time. It's a great sentiment you've captured with it.

Greg - I enjoyed your take on the prompt. Cleverly done and quite unexpected.

And I'm glad you enjoyed my second. I wrote it after sitting out on the deck with Kat not long after dark. The crickets were too loud to be ignored :)