Glad to see you're keeping up with the comments, and I really enjoyed your haiku, especially since you've told me before about the view from the office window being pretty spectacular. That gives added weight to the final line there :) I still think you should put the egg back in its cradle, no matter what the voices are telling you to do....
In the line of fire Jedward looked south, his mouth salivating from the bread smell and his stomach churning from the slaughterhouse stench, expecting to see the blackened lands and ashy smokeclouds as usual. Instead there was a line of fire running diagonally across the landscape, putting him in mind of Mordor. He followed it with his eyes even though the smoke made them water, glad to turn his head to see where it was headed to. Then he turned back, his brain having finally resolved the conflicting smells and focused on what his eyes were saying: the line of fire was definitely a chasm opening in the earth to reveal slowly bubbling lava.
Greg - I'm trying! At the minimum I'm not letting the backlog get past a week.
The egg and I are fine. Quit worrying.
This is a continuation, right? It's familiar enough that I recognize it but I'm having trouble remembering the details. Either way, though, I enjoyed the descriptions and details here.
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Glad to see you're keeping up with the comments, and I really enjoyed your haiku, especially since you've told me before about the view from the office window being pretty spectacular. That gives added weight to the final line there :)
I still think you should put the egg back in its cradle, no matter what the voices are telling you to do....
In the line of fire
Jedward looked south, his mouth salivating from the bread smell and his stomach churning from the slaughterhouse stench, expecting to see the blackened lands and ashy smokeclouds as usual. Instead there was a line of fire running diagonally across the landscape, putting him in mind of Mordor. He followed it with his eyes even though the smoke made them water, glad to turn his head to see where it was headed to. Then he turned back, his brain having finally resolved the conflicting smells and focused on what his eyes were saying: the line of fire was definitely a chasm opening in the earth to reveal slowly bubbling lava.
Greg - I'm trying! At the minimum I'm not letting the backlog get past a week.
The egg and I are fine. Quit worrying.
This is a continuation, right? It's familiar enough that I recognize it but I'm having trouble remembering the details. Either way, though, I enjoyed the descriptions and details here.
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