Tuesday February 16th, 2016

The exercise:

Write two haiku about: the river.

Utterly beautiful day here today. Apparently they took full advantage at daycare, as when I picked Max up I was told by one of his teachers that he'd spent four hours outside.

Sounds like my son all right.

I shall cherish the memory of today's warmth in the coming days, for the forecast is calling for almost nothing but clouds and rain for the next five days.

Mine:

Step in and let go;
I will carry away the
weight of your sorrows

*     *     *

Sitting on the bank
at the bend in the river -
I am the lookout

3 Comments:

morganna said...

Up from the river
Rolls the fog, filling the town
What lurks beyond sight?

Smooth and placid, glassy
Don't step in, the undertow
Waits to pull you down.

Greg said...

@Morganna: I think I prefer your first haiku today, though I change my mind every time I read them! But the fog just has the edge on the undertow for now :)

@Marc: I'm not convinced that five days of beautiful rain is really enough to make you miss Spring sunshine, but I'm sure you'll find a way to prove me wrong :) But it will stop daycare putting the children outside (unless they've been really naughty) I suppose!
I think I like your second haiku better today, partly because I'm curious as to what the look-out is watching out for.

The river
Autumn mists hang on
Dark waters, concealing the
River's twists and turns

Ice from remote floes
Floats unseen, a danger to
Those who drift along.

[I'm quite pleased with that acrostic, actually!]

Marc said...

Morganna - I'm with Greg and his difficulty in choosing a favorite. I think I'm leaning slightly towards your first though, for all the story that potentially awaits within.

Greg - yeah, they definitely spend a lot less time outdoors when it's raining. If it's really coming down I don't think they go out much at all (though I think they're required to have some outside time).

I'd say you have every right to be pleased with this one! Very impressive. Love the imagery in your first, and I enjoyed your tie-in to your acrostic in your second. Hard to pick, but I'll go with your first as well as my favorite this week.