Tuesday August 25th, 2009

The exercise:

Two Haiku Tuesday continues, despite the end of ultimate season. Mostly because I'm lazy. Partly because I do enjoy a haiku or two each week.

The topic tonight: it's in the eyes.

Mine:

My dear I must say
You have very enchanting
Windows to your soul

* * *

I can see just fine.
No, really I can. Honest!
Put the laser down.

5 Comments:

Greg said...

Ultimate's over already? That feels like it's been quite a short season. How did you do overall this time then?

Thank-you for the continuation of yesterday's piece, though I feel you only wrote half of it. What about the guy left behind? :-P

I like both your haikus, they work rather well as 'his point of view/her point of view'.

It's in the eyes

Conjunctivitis
Hayfever's bonus this year,
It is in my eyes.

-----

As green as rock pools,
As bright as supernovae,
Only made of glass.

g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

Your first is sweet; there's just something about the second that strikes me as amusing.

As soon as you mentioned eyes, I immediately thought of Connor's Second Dichotomy, and it was just too perfect an idea to pass up.
- - - - -
Vibrant, warm, cur'ous,
Enthusiasm abounds
In those living greys.
- - - - -
Cold, tired, judging
There's almost something sinister
In the Doctor's eyes.

Monica Manning said...

reddened amber eyes
watch as white lines disappear
blinded by false joy


* * *


eyes flowing with love
gazed with warmth at the wedding
now kill on command

Marc said...

Greg - well I didn't cave in and start haiku Tuesday until more than halfway through, so that might have something to do with it. We did okay overall, had a good bit of fun though.

And... I'll think about the other side of the story :)

I like both of yours, perhaps the first one slightly more.

g2 - hah, nicely done. I like the second one a lot :)

Monica - really liking the sinister turn in your second haiku.

g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

I wonder why you have such an affinity for the second one... such a mystery...