Tuesday August 25th, 2009

The exercise:

Two Haiku Tuesday continues, despite the end of ultimate season. Mostly because I'm lazy. Partly because I do enjoy a haiku or two each week.

The topic tonight: it's in the eyes.


My dear I must say
You have very enchanting
Windows to your soul

* * *

I can see just fine.
No, really I can. Honest!
Put the laser down.


Greg said...

Ultimate's over already? That feels like it's been quite a short season. How did you do overall this time then?

Thank-you for the continuation of yesterday's piece, though I feel you only wrote half of it. What about the guy left behind? :-P

I like both your haikus, they work rather well as 'his point of view/her point of view'.

It's in the eyes

Hayfever's bonus this year,
It is in my eyes.


As green as rock pools,
As bright as supernovae,
Only made of glass.

g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

Your first is sweet; there's just something about the second that strikes me as amusing.

As soon as you mentioned eyes, I immediately thought of Connor's Second Dichotomy, and it was just too perfect an idea to pass up.
- - - - -
Vibrant, warm, cur'ous,
Enthusiasm abounds
In those living greys.
- - - - -
Cold, tired, judging
There's almost something sinister
In the Doctor's eyes.

Monica Manning said...

reddened amber eyes
watch as white lines disappear
blinded by false joy

* * *

eyes flowing with love
gazed with warmth at the wedding
now kill on command

Marc said...

Greg - well I didn't cave in and start haiku Tuesday until more than halfway through, so that might have something to do with it. We did okay overall, had a good bit of fun though.

And... I'll think about the other side of the story :)

I like both of yours, perhaps the first one slightly more.

g2 - hah, nicely done. I like the second one a lot :)

Monica - really liking the sinister turn in your second haiku.

g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

I wonder why you have such an affinity for the second one... such a mystery...