The exercise:
Write two haiku about: miracles.
Already fell asleep on the couch, just want to get this typed up and go to bed.
So...
Mine:
Believe it or not,
it makes no difference to me,
for I know it's real
* * *
His tale could have been
A light gone too soon; instead
he escaped, unharmed
2 comments:
Heh, I think I know how you feel :)
I like your first haiku better today because the second feels a tiny bit forced. But then I'm not sure if it isn't a reference to the Wastelands that you have, in which case I understand it better!
Miracles
Vital phlogiston,
Summer's breath caught in a jar,
Aphrodisiac.
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The Dark Lady burps,
Summer turned into Autumn,
Bonfires burn too bright.
Greg - yeah, I recall having trouble squeezing the idea behind the second haiku into haiku form. So let us just pretend that it's about the Wastelands and move on :P
Consider me impressed that you managed to use Aphrodisiac in a haiku. That alone assure your first wins the day for me this go around :)
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