Daily writing prompts since June 9th, 2008
They can't make me eatI won't! Not until they fire The nurse who hates me.
The Strike 2 haikuambulance driverswere going on strike over pay illness become deathlightning strikes the tree it creates a bush firewipes out the whole State
Morganna - hah, the picture you've painted in my head of this patient is fantastic. I can just see the facial expression while this is being spoken/demanded.Dragonfly - really like your first one, as that final line just hammers the theme home. Nicely done!
@Morganna: I thing Marc said it perfectly to be honest, but I agree with him nonetheless -- it's so easy to picture this scene!@Dragonfly: again, I agree with Marc, the last line of your first haiku is apposite and punchy -- really, really good.@Marc: I held the laptop over an open flame until the invisible ink was revealed, and -- I'm sorry, but that first haiku of yours was just disappointing. But the second was much better, especially where you rhymed 'inconsequentialities' with 'sinning senescent dual disabilities'. That was quite something!StrikeShowboating again –The crowd are booing, then theRef... calls it a Strike!I don't play sport butKnitting is fun: three strikes meansEating all the wool....
cheers, guys,I guess the fact of life adds to the reality sucker punch of that line ;)
Greg - I'm not sure how I managed the syllable count there, but thanks!I'm also not sure that I'd want to compete in competitive knitting, as I'm quite sure that I'd be the one eating all the wool the vast majority of the time...
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