Tuesday October 1st, 2013

The exercise:

Welcome to October, aka Marc's birthday month. Write two haiku about: turning.

Another box program day in the books, leaving two remaining this season. I'd be a little more excited about that if there weren't weather reports threatening frost the next two nights, but we'll see how that goes.

Max had a surprisingly good sleep last night, considering how clogged his nostrils were before bed. I'm not expecting that to continue, but it was certainly a relief the night before a big harvest day.

Mine:

The nights grow colder,
causing the trees to believe
it's time to change leaves.

*     *     *

Past the bend, black smoke
reaches for the sky; a wheel
not turned hard enough.

4 Comments:

Greg said...

You're celebrating your birthday for the whole month of October? Won't that make you 65 by Hallowe'en? I can see Kat disapproving of this plan...!
Your weather sounds more seasonal than ours still; the temperatures are barely autumnal at the moment, and not that far off what we can get for summer. I'm hoping for single digits by the end of the month :)
I like your first haiku better today, because I like the nature reference. The second is bleak but excellent :)

Turning
She's in the shower
and the doorknob is turning...
I don't want to watch.

She turns towards him
But the curtain hides the knife –
We scream together.

[Well yes, I may have drawn a little inspiration from an old film today :)]

David said...

No Blood Sweat and Tears
A million times I said no
That song is such crap

Now you want Seger
Christ man, get some taste in music
At least say Night Moves

(like Greg, I went with some pop culture inspiration....)

morganna said...

And mine are more traditional ...
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Summer turns to fall
Geese fly away, fall turns to
Winter, white snow falls.

Faster and faster
She spins, a little girl top,
All fall down, giggling.

Marc said...

Greg - since Max was kind enough to wait until November to be born, October remains my month around here :P

Nicely done, I would not have thought to go that route with this prompt. I like that most everybody reading those would know exactly which movie you've been inspired by.

David - hah, really enjoyed the voice in yours. The attitude comes across so very clearly :D

Morganna - really, really like your first one. That's some excellent work :)