The exercise:
Two Haiku Tuesday brings to you this week: the mountain.
And yet another picture! This one taken on the road back to Vancouver:
Mine:
Your weather worn gaze
watches the world rush on by.
You must think us mad.
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I stand on this peak
a conqueror... could you tell
me how to get down?
3 comments:
I love the mountains you've got around Vancouver. If I can work out how to get one shipped over here, I'll do it!
I like your second haiku best, but the first one has a lovely weariness about it.
The mountain
Angry mountain scream!
Letting off a little steam
(And lots of lava)
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This was only a
Molehill last night. Who built it
Up to a mountain?
I've got three, because the first one is a blatant knock-off of your second one, Marc (actually, it's what I thought I read the first time through):
I stand on this peak
a conqueror ... how dare you
tell me to get down?
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Millions of years I've
Stood here watching, wearing away.
Today the machines came.
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Mountains of things are
Mine! You mean I can't take it with
Me? That's impossible!
Greg - your second one is fantastic :)
Morganna - I quite like your version of mine!
I think I like your last one best though :)
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