Tuesday January 20th, 2015

The exercise:

Write two haiku about: the rescue.

Took Max to StrongStart for a couple hours after lunch today, which was a first. The one in Osoyoos only runs in the morning but the place in OK Falls does 11:30 to 2:30 on Tuesdays and Thursdays.

It was nice. Much quieter than last time, so Max had his choice of things to play with. No gym time but he didn't seem to mind.

Feeling very tired now. Must. Get. This. Written. Before. Sleep. Wins.

Mine:

Drowning in a sea
of tears, you swam out to me
and rescued my heart

*     *     *

At the bottom of
a well, I sent the dog for
help. I'm still down here.

4 Comments:

ivybennet said...

Haha, I love that the last haiku is about Lassie! I can't tell which one I like more.

Rescue:

This darkness inside
Suffocates me day and night.
I can’t even cry.

I peg of you please,
To see me and understand.
I need help, my friend.

Greg said...

@Ivy: I think I like your first haiku better this week, though I do like that you've combined the two into a whole story.

@Marc: Sounds like Max quite enjoyed being able to take his pick of things to play with then! How interested was he in the other children being new?
I definitely prefer your second haiku this week, but that's because we all know that Lassie never meant to fetch help, she just wanted people to point and laugh at the idiot in the well :)

Rescue
Riding to her aid,
Enthused to be a hero...
Shoots her by mistake.

------

Castles imprison
Usually, but she's hiding;
Evading rescue.

[thank-you for a six letter prompt; it makes the acrostic much easier!]

Aholiab said...

The Rescue

Lost, tired, snow-covered.
Where is the big shaggy dog
With his brandy keg?

Perfect bubbles drift
From her partly open lips.
Pull her from the pool!

Marc said...

Ivybennet - :)

I'm with Greg on yours. Really like your first one on its own, but together your two work so well.

Greg - not particularly. He tends to be more interested in the toys than other kids, unless the other kids happen to be interested in the same toys... and are okay with sharing them.

Hah, have to go with your first this week. That's just great.

And you're welcome, though it had totally skipped my mind at the time.

Aholiab - hmm, tough choice here. I think that final line in your second one wins the day, though I have definitely wondered where the dog and his booze in your first were when I needed them.