The exercise:
Today's starter is Dictionary.com's word of the day: iconoclast.
Mine:
The stained glass litters the floor,
The priest tries to bar the door;
But their numbers are too great,
This church is doomed to its fate.
Marble statues lay broken,
Too late to hide the tokens,
The monks flee the screaming men,
Lost is this temple of Zen.
Can't they stop and look around,
To see this truth so profound:
Life is light as a feather,
We're all in this together.
3 comments:
Dramatic! I quite like the way the ending becomes calmer and more beseeching. If I may offer a little critique, the last line of the first verse seems like a good way to introduce the next verse to me. If you rewrote it as
"The church is doomed. Its fate:" you move very smoothly into the description of the destruction.
I should make my offering now, for you to tear to shreds in a deitic rage ;-)
Iconoclast,
Fading fast,
What do you believe when belief is gone?
Solipsist,
Do you exist?
What does it mean to be more than one?
And finally (long comment this morning, sorry): would the destruction of all belief at the climax of tantric sex be called an iconogasm?
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Ha ha, I love long comments - I'm prone to doing them myself - so no apology needed :)
I like yours. Once again I needed to google one of your words - your vocabulary is intimidating.
As for mine: what I was attempting, and now realize I could have done more clearly, was to have two different scenes of destruction: one a catholic church, the other an eastern temple. So the separation was intentional.
And I'll leave your last question for another to answer :D
I'd missed that, but it's obvious when I look back it -- the stained glass is from a different church to the Zen monks. That's me being careless I suspect, rather than a fault on your part.
Sorry about the vocabulary, I do cryptic crosswords as a hobby and that expands my vocabulary gradually without me really noticing it. Not always in good ways though :)
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