Satuday November 14th, 2009

The exercise:

I thought I should mention that today is World Diabetes Day, mostly because I don't think it gets nearly the attention it should. Especially with this dreaded H1N1 going around. I wonder what the reaction would be if every diabetic death received the same amount of press as each swine flu one has been getting...

Anyway, before I get off on a rant, your four line poem prompt is: moving target.

NaNo Word Count: 29,032
NaNo Target: 23,335


You'll never hit the bulls-eye,
The target just keeps moving;
But you'll never admit it,
So you just keep on shooting.


g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

They dug around all the concrete,
Not trying to be t'all discreet,
And without further argume-t
Some jerks they went and moved Target.
- - - - -
How they lifted up a giant discount store, I have no idea.

Greg said...

So what are you doing for World Diabetes day then? I ate Maple Caramels on the plane, so as to keep them out of the hands of diabetics who might otherwise suffer... something like that, anyway.

Oddly enough, it looks like I might be back in Moncton at the end of the month, but still no sign of the west coast. That might have to be next year :(

@Marc: very neat little poem, and quite descriptive of some people I work with!

@g2: I really like the idea behind your poem, but the rhymes feel a little forced. I guess you were writing quickly though :)

Moving target

The Tibetan crowd were hushed and standing back,
To watch the foreign archer shoot the rabbit,
But with such an erratic moving target,
The archer missed and shot the sacred yak.

g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

You're right Greg, it was rather forced, but I was tired, couldn't quite think straight, and I really wanted to tweak the original idea. Y'all know that saying about desperate times and all.

Mr. Walker said...

Just wanted to say I like your blog. I'm in the midst of NaNoWriMo, so I'm a little focused on that now, but I'm sure I'll be back again for some more writing practice. Thanks!

Marc said...

g2 - hah, I'll admit to not even thinking of that particular target. Nicely done. But to add to Greg's point, perhaps it would have been better to abandon rhyming on it?

Greg - um, by drinking too much, apparently.

And oh dear, that archer got himself a spot of trouble there! Nice one :)

Mr. Walker - glad to hear it and thanks for stopping by. Good luck with your novel!