Tuesday August 24th, 2010

The exercise:

Two haiku about: bumblebees.

Went for a wander around the garden last night with my camera and found a whole lot of bees still hanging around in the sunflowers. I snapped a few pictures, I liked this one best:


A friend of Kat's who wasn't able to make it out for the wedding arrived just a few hours ago - it's kinda nice to have just one visitor after having sixty all at once :)

Mine:

My dear Bea mumbles
and bumbles but I love her
just the way she is.

*     *     *

Bumblebees buzzing
around and around, an air
club coalescing.

7 Comments:

Greg said...

Oh wow, the bee picture is amazing! I thought at first that you'd snapped a colony of bees, then my eyes refocussed and I realised what I was seeing. Nice work!

One guest instead of sixty sounds like the right way to do things :)

I like your second haiku best I think, for the lovely mouthfeel of the last line.

Bumblebees

Black and yellow stripe,
Fuzzy body, nectar-high,
Bumblebees are cute.

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While playing "The Flight
Of the Bumblebee," we were
Assaulted by them.

Zhongming said...

Marc - Wow, that picture look great! I like both of your haiku, especially the first one slightly more :)

Greg - I like both of yours since you made them look obvious and real :)

Mine:

The smell of nectar,
Must have attracted,
This lovely bumblebees.

***

Flowers and bumblebees,
Are just like lovers,
They need each other.

Heather said...

What kind of camera do you have? The clarity is excellent! Or did you photo edit it in closer?

No haiku. Lo siento.

g2 (la pianista irlandesa) said...

Inside all the time,
I miss the sound of the bees
bumbling 'round my head.

The only buzzings
I hear now are florescents
and the lonely fly.
- - - - - - - - - -
I had Lunacy on the brain at that moment, trying to get Connor back in my head once my turn rolls back around.

And like others were saying: holy crow that's a fantastic picture. What sort of camera did you use?

Marc said...

Greg - coalescing is a great word, isn't it?

I think I like your second best, just because I wasn't expecting that ending. The abruptness of it won me over :D

Zhongming - love your second one, that's great!

Heather - see today's post for my response :)

g2 - thank you, and I think you did a fantastic job with your haiku.

morganna said...

Yellow, orange, black stripes
Tumbling about my flowers
Thank you for your work!

I don't like the last line, but oh well.

Marc said...

Morganna - I agree with you about the final line, but I love the idea of it.

Hmm, that's a tough one. I can't think of another line that would express the same idea and fit within the five syllable count.